论文 I 措辞建议Paper I wording suggestions
建议（未经评审）Suggestion (not reviewed)
本页全部内容是 I022（Claude，2026-10-16）对论文 I 措辞的建议，未经 PI 评审。它不改变 I021 的任何状态；PI 决定是否采纳（I021 决策项 D5）。每条建议都带着它所依赖的主张的状态标签。PI 请求原文（2026-10-16T12:04Z）："文章的措辞你给我些建议吧，并且更新到handbook里。"
Everything on this page is I022 (Claude, 2026-10-16) suggesting wording for Paper I, not reviewed by the PI. It changes no status in I021; the PI decides whether to adopt it (I021 decision D5). Every suggestion carries the status tag of the claim it rests on. The PI's request, verbatim (2026-10-16T12:04Z): "Give me some suggestions on the paper's wording, and update them into the handbook."
来源Source: cognition-os/insights/I022_paper1_wording_suggestions.md; I021_s09_paper_plan_v2.md (the claim statuses after RT-01..RT-13); sessions/2026-10-16.md
1 标题：三个选项Title: three options
I021 的现行工作标题是 "The hot outflow of NGC 3079 to 66 kpc with XMM-Newton and Einstein Probe FXT: walls, a chimney, no cap and an over-pressured relic"。它的五个钩子有四个已经比标题说的弱：
I021's current working title is "The hot outflow of NGC 3079 to 66 kpc with XMM-Newton and Einstein Probe FXT: walls, a chimney, no cap and an over-pressured relic". Four of its five hooks are now weaker than the title says:
- "to 66 kpc"：壁 MEASURED 到 ~55 kpc；55–66 kpc 是 CANDIDATE（含系统学 2.0–2.9σ，L7）。"to 66 kpc": the walls are MEASURED to ~55 kpc; 55–66 kpc is a CANDIDATE (2.0–2.9σ with systematics, L7).
- "a chimney"：边缘形状的变化是 MEASURED；3-D 空心烟囱是 INFERRED（39 kpc 以上双片模型拟合得同样好；"空心"是 ~2σ 上限，L9）。"a chimney": the edge-shape change is MEASURED; the 3-D hollow chimney is INFERRED (a two-sheet model fits as well above 39 kpc; "hollow" is a ~2σ limit, L9).
- "no cap"：缺失性是 MEASURED；作为对更早壳层的约束，它 CONDITIONAL 于 n_H(47) ≥ ~4.5e-5（L8）。"no cap": the absence is MEASURED; as a constraint on an earlier shell it is CONDITIONAL on n_H(47) ≥ ~4.5e-5 (L8).
- "an over-pressured relic"：CONDITIONAL 于 FXT 响应（倾向模型 q ~2.0–2.1，L13）与外延范围（L15）。"an over-pressured relic": CONDITIONAL on the FXT response (q ~2.0–2.1 in the favoured model, L13) and on the reach (L15).
| 选项Option | 标题Title | 理由Reason |
|---|---|---|
| A （建议）(recommended) | "Hot outflow walls of NGC 3079 traced to ~55 kpc with XMM-Newton and Einstein Probe FXT""Hot outflow walls of NGC 3079 traced to ~55 kpc with XMM-Newton and Einstein Probe FXT" | 只含 MEASURED 内容。候选延展、形状变化与压力放进摘要，各带状态。Only MEASURED content. The candidate extension, the shape change and the pressure go into the abstract with their statuses. |
| B | "The edges of the hot wind of NGC 3079 to 55-66 kpc: XMM-Newton and Einstein Probe FXT""The edges of the hot wind of NGC 3079 to 55-66 kpc: XMM-Newton and Einstein Probe FXT" | 保留范围，所以摘要必须立刻说明 55–66 kpc 是候选。Keeps the range, so the abstract must say at once that 55–66 kpc is a candidate. |
| C | "... : over-pressured walls left by an earlier, stronger outflow""... : over-pressured walls left by an earlier, stronger outflow" | 只在 FXT 空白场检验确认响应误差之后使用（job 2026-10-16-fxt-blankfield-vignetting），且 C11/C2 关闭之前不用。Use only after the FXT blank-field test confirms the response error (job 2026-10-16-fxt-blankfield-vignetting), and not before C11/C2 close. |
来源Source: I022_paper1_wording_suggestions.md §1; I021_s09_paper_plan_v2.md (the working title, L7/L8/L9/L13/L15 statuses)
2 摘要：逐条措辞Abstract: claim-by-claim wording
| 主张Claim | 避免Avoid | 建议措辞Suggested wording | Status |
|---|---|---|---|
| L7 延伸extent | 英文原文（I022）："detected to 66 kpc" | 英文原文（I022）："The X-shaped walls are detected to ~55 kpc (3.8-4.8 sigma at 39-55 kpc); a candidate extension reaches ~66 kpc (2.0-2.9 sigma, depending on the systematics included)." | MEASURED / CANDIDATE |
| L9 形状shape | 英文原文（I022）："a hollow chimney" | 英文原文（I022）："On the WSW side the wall edge changes from a ~46 deg cone to a near-constant width at ~40 kpc; the interior emissivity above ~39 kpc is consistent with zero (~2 sigma limit)." | MEASURED (edge) / INFERRED (3-D) |
| L8 帽cap | "there is no cap"（作为物理事实）"there is no cap" (as physics) | 英文原文（I022）："We find no rim-brightened cap to 90 kpc. This excludes a thin-shell cap at 55-70 kpc only if the halo density at 47 kpc is >= 4.5e-5 cm^-3." | MEASURED / CONDITIONAL |
| L10 kT | 英文原文（I022）："the gas cools with height" | 英文原文（I022）："kT is 0.25-0.29 keV at 8-28 kpc and 0.18-0.26 keV at 41-61 kpc; within one consistent region set the change from 17-28 to 41-61 kpc is +0.03 +- 0.03 keV (stat only)." | CONDITIONAL |
| L11 O/Fe | 英文原文（I022）："O/Fe = 5-10" | 英文原文（I022）："The wall gas is O-rich relative to Fe at all heights (solar O/Fe rejected at ~3 sigma at 17-28 kpc); absolute values are model-dependent." | MEASURED (relative) |
| L12 晕halo | 英文原文（I022）："the halo density is 5.8e-5" | 英文原文（I022）："The halo at 47 kpc is not detected: n_H < 0.9-1.1e-4 cm^-3 (2 sigma) in the favoured FXT response model, < 1.8e-4 in the most conservative background model." | LIMIT |
| L13 压力pressure | 英文原文（I022）："the walls are over-pressured ~3x" | 英文原文（I022）："At the best-fit halo the walls are ~2-3 times over-pressured; this depends on the FXT off-axis calibration, which we test with blank fields." | CONDITIONAL |
| L14 能量energy | 英文原文（I022）："the present wind cannot build the structure (x10-40)" | 英文原文（I022）："The X-ray-visible present wind supplies only 1/7-1/14 of the WSW wall thermal energy." | INFERRED |
| L15 遗迹relic | 英文原文（I022）："a 3.4e57 erg episode that ended 50-75 Myr ago" | 英文原文（I022）："If the walls are the edge of an earlier, stronger episode, it needed ~1.4-2.5e57 erg per lobe for the measured 55-66 kpc reach (3.4e57 only for 80-100 kpc)." | CONDITIONAL |
来源Source: I022_paper1_wording_suggestions.md §2 (the table, verbatim)
3 要避免或只定义一次的词Words to avoid or define once
- "detect"：只用于带场散误差的 MEASURED；2–3σ 用 "candidate"；非探测用 "limit"。"detect": only for MEASURED with field-scatter errors; "candidate" for 2-3 sigma; "limit" for non-detections.
- "chimney"、"hollow"：只定义一次，指边缘形状的变化；摘要中绝不作为 3-D 事实。"chimney", "hollow": define once as the edge-shape change; never as a 3-D fact in the abstract.
- "relic"：只与 "if" 连用；绑定到 L14（能量亏缺，稳健）而不是 L13（压力，条件性）。"relic": only with "if"; tie it to L14 (the energy deficit, robust) rather than to L13 (pressure, conditional).
- "cools"、"cooling"：C5（前景/参考区）关闭之前不用。"cools", "cooling": not until C5 (foreground/reference) closes.
- "excluded"（对平衡晕）：只说 "in the favoured FXT response model"。"excluded" for the balance halo: only "in the favoured FXT response model".
- "first EP-FXT diffuse"：不是第一（Tang et al. 2026, Abell 1795）。"first EP-FXT diffuse" anything: not first (Tang et al. 2026, Abell 1795).
来源Source: I022_paper1_wording_suggestions.md §3
4 故事顺序（建议）Story order (suggested)
- 数据与标定（稳健的底座）：重处理的 XMM、FXT v1.30、MOS 梯度与 MOS1 CCD4 伪迹。Data and calibration (the robust base): the reprocessed XMM, FXT v1.30, the MOS gradient and the MOS1 CCD4 artefacts.
- 形态与延伸（L6、L7、L9）：最强的结果。Morphology and extent (L6, L7, L9): the strongest results.
- 热与化学状态（L10、L11）：相对性陈述。Thermal and chemical state (L10, L11): relative statements.
- 能量学（L14）：稳健的能量亏缺。Energetics (L14): the robust energy deficit.
- 压力平衡与历史（L12、L13、L15）：明确标注条件于 FXT 标定。Pressure balance and history (L12, L13, L15): clearly marked as conditional on the FXT calibration.
来源Source: I022_paper1_wording_suggestions.md §4
5 FXT 15′ 超出：建议的讨论文字The FXT 15′ excess: suggested discussion text
MEASURED（检验，暂定）I022 建议的讨论文字（英文原文）："The FXT major-axis profile shows a mild excess at 14-16′ (~80-90 kpc). It comes from the NNW side of the disk axis (+2.6 PW at 12-17′; rank 4 of 72 rotated sectors, ~1.4 sigma) and belongs to a broad north-south asymmetry of the FXT map, not to the wind axis. A cap would lie on the minor axis, where the 14-16′ level equals the all-azimuth mean. We do not interpret it." 本手册的注记：这段文字与 §3.5 的 15′ 检验一致；瞄准点偏移（2.3′ N）预测相反的符号，所以不能解释该不对称（session 2026-10-16）。南北不对称本身是未决问题（见工作台未决问题表）。
MEASURED (the check, provisional) I022's suggested discussion text (verbatim): "The FXT major-axis profile shows a mild excess at 14-16′ (~80-90 kpc). It comes from the NNW side of the disk axis (+2.6 PW at 12-17′; rank 4 of 72 rotated sectors, ~1.4 sigma) and belongs to a broad north-south asymmetry of the FXT map, not to the wind axis. A cap would lie on the minor axis, where the 14-16′ level equals the all-azimuth mean. We do not interpret it." This handbook's note: the text agrees with the 15′ check in §3.5; the aim-point offset (2.3′ N) predicts the opposite sign, so it cannot explain the asymmetry (session 2026-10-16). The north-south asymmetry itself is an open problem (see the workbench open-problems table).
来源Source: I022_paper1_wording_suggestions.md §5; sessions/2026-10-16.md FOUND (the 15′ check, the aim-point argument)
6 更新 2026-10-16 ~14:20Z：空白场 Pass 2 之后的措辞后果Update 2026-10-16 ~14:20Z: wording consequences after blank-field Pass 2
MEASURED（空白场检验本身；科学结论待定）I022 §6 的记录：平软项在 21 个空白高纬场中以同样强度出现（0.5–1.3 keV 为粒子模型的 5 倍），v1.30 渐晕也不太陡（γ 1.1–1.5）。因此加性背景的解释现在更被倾向。措辞后果：晕上限改为 1.0–1.8e-4，平衡晕不被排除，最佳拟合下超压约 1.3–1.8，"遗迹"必须建立在能量缺口（L14，RT-14 待定）而不是压力上。标题选项 A 因此更明确是安全选择。本手册的注记：job 自己的报告（REPORT.luna.md Pass 2）更谨慎 —— 0.5–1.3 keV 合并 γ = 1.60 ± 0.08（A）/ 1.18 ± 0.06（B）、b/粒子 = 5.33 ± 0.12（A）/ 5.07 ± 0.13（B），与 NGC 3079 的 5× 一致；但场间散度极大（χ²/dof 56–1126），报告原话是"不构成对 v1.30 的科学接受"。所以本页把 I022 的倾向记为建议，把 job 的谨慎记为事实，最终判断留给 PI。
MEASURED (the blank-field test itself; the scientific verdict is Pending) I022 §6 records: the flat soft term appears at the same strength in 21 blank high-latitude fields (5× the particle model at 0.5–1.3 keV) and the v1.30 vignetting is not too steep (γ 1.1–1.5). So the additive-background reading is now favoured. Wording consequences: the halo upper becomes 1.0–1.8e-4, the balance halo is not excluded, the over-pressure is ~1.3–1.8 at the best fit, and "relic" must rest on the energy deficit (L14, RT-14 pending) rather than on pressure. Title option A is therefore even more clearly the safe choice. This handbook's note: the job's own report (REPORT.luna.md Pass 2) is more cautious — the pooled 0.5–1.3 keV γ = 1.60 ± 0.08 (A) / 1.18 ± 0.06 (B) and b/particle = 5.33 ± 0.12 (A) / 5.07 ± 0.13 (B), matching the 5× of NGC 3079; but the field-to-field scatter is huge (χ²/dof 56–1126) and the report says in its own words that this "does not establish scientific acceptance of v1.30". So this page records I022's preference as a suggestion and the job's caution as a fact, leaving the final judgement to the PI.
来源Source: I022_paper1_wording_suggestions.md §6; .agent/jobs/2026-10-16-fxt-blankfield-vignetting/REPORT.luna.md (Pass 2 verdict and the pooled table); REDTEAM_QUEUE.md RT-11/RT-12